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Original: 9/9/2008 4:03 PM
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Tuesday, September 09, 2008

THE FINAL TALE

 
OK so, I finaly made the last Chapter of the Angel who Fell. I hope you all enjoy, leave me alot of comments to tell me how much you like it. =D



~That’s all there was~
A piece of stone in the desert
Mounted flat in the crust of the earth
Covered by sand and gravel after a gust
A single grain, that's all there was
A decoy in a battlefield
A crater in an open field
Shattered raiment in the wilderness
A raucous voice, nevertheless
Blood oozing from the flesh
Dropping on my wool-sewed dress
Veins popping from underneath the skin
Metal locks on my limbs
Leaves of trees on loamy soil
Fire that eats up all their toil
Mountain restless from smokes and bombs
Stones and rocks melting on the pond
Lions and tigers feasting on their prey
Ants and insects on horses wounds and hay
Worms in soil and into mouths
Old-aged suffering in gout
Locusts spurng to wreck the wheatfeild
Scarecrow made a greater yeild
Drought that kills herbs in a blast
That's all there was to last
From the battle of the pasted

 Posted 9/9/2008 4:03 PM - 19 Views - 2 eProps - 1 Comment

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I really like the tone and feel of this one, but some of the lines seemed a little off.
I give it a solid b+ out of 20000 points. How you want to convert that is up to you (hint, it's in the plus)
maybe a-? somewhere like right there. the beats seem arhythmic at times is all.
Posted 9/10/2008 1:43 AM by Ufbad - reply


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